Friday, October 6, 2017

No One Needs To Know...

        I took off my Halloween costume, washed the paint off my face, put on my pajamas, brushed my teeth, and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I first heard the sound ... creak. I thought for sure it was my mom just checking on me, but I had stopped trick or treating early. But, Mom wasn't back yet... I turned over, facing my door. 2 bloody red eyes stood out in the sea of blackness. I blinked. It was gone. I started to breathe heavily. Oh no. Was I going to die? I clutched my sheets on for dear life. I turned my lamp on. For a second I thought I saw a creepy smile along with the eyes in the semi darkness. I blinked again. I could go get someone, but that would mean that I would have to cross in the darkness to get out. My light flickered. How? It flickered again. This is what horror movies were made of! Suddenly my alarm went off. I screamed. It wasn't supposed to do that. It was way to early! I quickly turned it off. I made up my mind. I needed to get someone. What if the red eyes were still there? Or that creepy smile. I decided to risk it...
          
         I slowly got out of my bed. I grabbed my prosthetic leg for self defense. I had always joked about using my leg to fight, but this time I was dead serious. (pardon the pun) I started to hop to the door with my leg in hand. A thought hit me. Mom and dad were gone. Everyone had left! What would I do when I got outside of my room?If I made it that far. I thought of the phone. That would be my way to contact someone. That was my goal.I was getting close to the door when I saw the red eyes inches from my own. I screamed and lost my balance, falling to the floor. My leg clattered next to me. The red eyes followed me and I struggled to find my leg. I curled my fingers around it and tried to whack the eyes. I missed and then struck the eyes. It went right through. I slipped on my leg and ran!

        I wrenched open my door and ran out of my room. Everything was dark. Not even a trace of light. I decided to lock myself in the bathroom. It had no windows and some water. I started down what seemed to be a never ending hall. I searched for the hall light. I switched it on, but it didn't work. The face scared me again. I ran to the bathroom. The light worked. I locked myself in. I decided to wait. I was scared, but I waited. "Snap!" I said out loud. I clapped my hands over my mouth. I had forgotten about the phone. Suddenly the light flickered. Oh no. not again. I looked in the mirror. A bloody person with a gruesome smiling face and creepy makeup was behind me. I screamed and turned around. No one was there. I turned back to the mirror my breath catching, tears stinging my eyes. The lights flickered and he came closer. I screamed for help. The lights flickered one last time and went out. I could feel his breath on my neck. I was paralyzed with fear. His hand stopped my scream.  He whispered into my ear very slowly. I could almost see the smile. "No one needs to know..."  

Written by Lollie Wimmer.
Hope you have a Happy Halloween!

6 comments:

  1. That was awesome Lollie! You did a good job on it. I saw that you said, "I clutched my sheets on for dear life." and I didn't understand why you put the on where you did. Other than that it was a great short story!

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  3. Great Job!!! You could make a book out of this!!!(PLEASE)!!!!! Anyways, I just noticed in the first paragraph you started one of your sentences with "2" I think it would be a little better if you spelled out the word like "two" but that is just because it is the first of the sentence (it kinda confused me). Amazing job though really!!!

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  4. Oh wow! This was great and creepy! The only thing I have a problem is that what happened after the (is it a slasher?) thing whispered, "No one needs to know."

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  5. This is awesome! I love how you incorporated your leg! This was super creepy, and I love it! I agree with Kennedie, when you start a sentence with a number, I think spelling it out would be a little bit better! But this is an amazing story and you could make like a horror movie out of it, no joke!

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  6. Lol! What a great story! You did well with building suspense and creating a mood. Excellent writing! Yes, spell out a number if it at the start of a sentence. As you revise this awesome plot for a horror move, use more figurative language to give depth and texture to your writing. Loved it! Shout out to your leg too--that made me grin:)

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