Dear Mrs. Gubler,
Hello this is Anna Steel! I heard you were thinking about inviting a celebrity to our school. I was thinking about that and I thought a good celebrity that would be good for school is The Piano Guys! They are so good and they play fun and new amazing songs! They always make there songs sound amazing. I know they have some pretty amazing stories. They probably have so many of stories about when the travel places for tour! I know the guy that plays the piano his daughter died and that would be a good story about trials and how to get trough them. They could tell us how why they wanted to form this group and how did they got so good! We wouldn't just enjoy we would learn something. I think they are a really good choice because they are to famous like a movie star so they wouldn't be to hard to get! They would be so inspirational and really fun! And I know the kids would LOVE them! I hope that helped you and I hope you will have them come! Thank you!
- Anna Steel
This is such a great post! I love your style of writing! The only mistake I saw was, in the middle of the paragraph the word through is spelled "trough". Other than that, keep up the great work!:)
ReplyDeleteI like how you did this. You made the paragraph really long and the style is good. The only thing (p.s. I make the worst criticism ever)is that you spelled something wrong.
ReplyDeleteThat was such an amazing post Anna! I definitely agree with you that the Piano Guys would be great to have! The only mistake I found was the same as Addie's when you spelt through wrong. Great job!! :)
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ReplyDeleteLove the Piano Guys. A few years ago, Jon Schmidt (piano guy) was at Lava Ridge and played for us; it was as cool as you might think! I liked your reasons for having them--solid writing. As you revise, double-check grammar and maybe switch-up exclamation points and periods. Good work girl!
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