Dear Mrs. Gubler,
I heard that you are inviting a celebrity to our school! It would be amazing if you could invite Travis Wall. He is an amazing dancer and dance choreographer, and is on the TV show So You Think You Can Dance. If he came to our school, hopefully he would show us some of his amazing dances and talk about all of his experiences that he has had while dancing. He could also talk about how hard work can pay off and how to reach your goals. It would be more of a fun assembly if he came, kind of like when the Foreign Figures band played some of their songs for us! I can't even imagine how fun it would be if Travis Wall came to our school. Hopefully you can make this happen!
Sincerely,
Kennedie Harris
Kennedie Harris
This is great Kennedie! I didn't exactly catch any mistakes! This is awesome! Good job!
ReplyDeleteAmazing work Kennedie! You made some very strong points, and you painted a story in my mind of what he would do! Maybe you might consider putting quotation marks around the name of the TV show next time, but overall, I can't keep my eyes of it!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Kennedie! I really loved your vocabulary, but maybe try to make your sentences a little longer next time.
ReplyDeleteNice unique idea. I'm a big fan of Travis Wall-that would be really, really cool. Great writing overall. Yes, maybe the show in quotes and varying your sentence length is always a good idea. Well done!!
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