Dear Mrs. Gubler,
To start, I think that you should invite Jon Schmidt to our school because he will be a great addition to hope week, by inspiring everybody with his skills. He is so good, that if people could hear him play at our school then they might be inspired to keep their grades up so maybe one day they could gain wonderful talents like him. Another thing he could do is tell about the trials that he has gone through recently, like how his daughter died while hiking. This could help everybody understand that even famous people go through hard things. That is why you should invite the Jon Schmidt to our school.
Secondly, you should invite Jon Schmidt to our school because he could put on a performance in front of the whole school. This would be really cool seeing how he has made so many cool songs. It would be an extraordinary performance sitting there listening to him play amazing songs. I think that it would also be a nice way to celebrate all the schools hard work this year. I think the whole school can agree with me that we should have Jon Schmidt to our school.
From,
Will Nadauld.
Wow! That is a great idea. Your writing is so good, although you could say what Jon Schmidt's talent is. Besides that your post was well written and had good details
ReplyDeleteI love Jon Schmidt! He is pretty amazing! I think that he would be a great celebrity to come to our school! I agree with Will though, you should probably tell us what his awesome talent is, haha! Other than that this was really good.
ReplyDeleteThat was super good! That would be really cool if he came! Maybe don´t say,¨That is why Jon Shmidt to our school¨ in your first paragraph. But other than that it is super good!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! The only thing that I noticed needed to be fixed was, at the very end. You put a period after saying "From, Will Nadauld"
ReplyDeleteLove it! Anna S. requested them too. So, a few years ago, Jon Schmidt did come and it was amazing! His story of heartache is very powerful and it would be awesome to have him visit. Good organization and transitions in your writing. As you revise, follow advice above. Great job Will!
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