Dear Mrs. Gubler,
I think that we should have Brandon Mull come to our school. Lots of students have read his books like Fablehaven etc. Lots of students know who he is and it would be pretty cool to have him come to our school and talk about his books and the inspiration he had to write them. I for one think it would be really cool to have him come.
Sincerely,
Halle Westbrook
This is a great idea. You made the reasons fit pretty well. The only thing I don't like about it is that you only have four sentences, yeah, the worst constructive criticism ever was just made by me.
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Halle! I loved your point of view and think it's a great idea. However I did notice that you forgot to indent at the begging of your paragraph, but other than that is was good.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Halle! It was really good, one of the things that I noticed was that you started two of your sentences with "Lots". It was still pretty good though! Awesome job!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Halle! I think that Brandon Mull coming is a great idea, but maybe next time, try making your paragraph a little longer.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job Halle! Although you could have a little more, but other than that it is perfect.
ReplyDeleteExcellent start! I love the idea of Brandon Mull coming to visit--love his writing:) Yes, write more--more specific reasons and details. Thanks!!
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