Dear Mrs. Gubler,
I heard that you want a celebrity to come to our school. I think that having Lebron James come would be awesome. Lebron James is a pro basketball player. He has won three NBA championships and MVP of the league four times. Lebron would be good to come to our school because he puts in hard work. He could talk to us about how he got to the NBA. I know that Lebron would inspire many students to work hard and achieve goals. Also, he is really big for reading. Before games and during free time he loves to read. This would show many students that reading is good for them and that it is cool. Plus who doesn't want to meet Lebron James? It would be great if he came to our school.
Sincerely, Will Warner
I like your writing is really great. You have really good transitions. The only thing I noticed is when you said " He is really big for reading". I'm probably the only one who doesn't get that, but I couldn't find any other mistakes.
ReplyDeleteGood job Will! That was awesome! Good Punctuation. One thing is you forgot to put a indent before you paragraph, but other than that it was good.
ReplyDeleteExcellent writing--I like the flow and good justification. As you revise, add a bit more detail and some grammar checking, but very good job all around!
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