The black cat twitched its tail, then hissed.
"wow", I said. I thought that it might be having a bad day. I mean, it was 10:00 and the air was cold, so cold that I could see my breath. and it felt humid like the low hanging air was going to freeze ITSELF. The smell of wet asphalt rose to greet my nostrils and everyone in this town.
"This Halloween is a bust", I screamed so loud buddy (my brother) plugged his ears next to me
"JEZZE man, you don't have to be so loud" he spoke annoyed.
"HISSSSSSSS" in a screeching voice.
"It's the cat," buddy said, get it
we chased it, and chased, all the way into mr. Mccormick's house. the cat ran up the steps onto his ugly porch with the screen door hanging on for dear life. the old man came out, picked up his cat, and ran at us full force. I'm talking charging like he had something fuling it other than adrenaline. he chased us and I said,
"you can't get me!!!!!"
I felt like I was in that show, Scooby Doo. when they are getting chased. But only it was more scary, than funny. when I looked back ahead of me (and stopped looking at him) He was stopped and smiling. we were at my house and my mom was looking at us, and I was getting the look. THEE look, like you did something wrong, but with a hint of "hahaha I got you." Feeling uninformed, mom told me and buddy,
"I told mr. Mccormick to chase you meddling kids down, and you are grounded!"
Patience Cox
Patience Cox
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ReplyDeleteGreat job, I thought it was good but I don't think it is nesesary to put a space in between each sentence. other wise good job
ReplyDeleteWow! Great writing! The only suggestion I'd give is to go into a little bite more detail, but there was a lot of voice like someone was telling me the story. Good job!
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