Monday, October 16, 2017


          I took off my Halloween costume, washed the paint off my face, put on my pajamas, brushed my teeth, and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I first heard the sound of tapping on the front door." Ugh, probably trick or treaters." I said to myself. I decided to just let them go away. Not even ten seconds later did I hear it again. This time louder. I went down stairs to tell them to leave but when I opened the door no one was there." What the..." I said to myself . As I was closing the door I heard a tapping sound upstairs. I ran upstairs to see who it was cause I was home alone. When I got up there no one was there. "This is creepy" I whispered. Suddenly the phone started ringing. I ran back downstairs to answer it. " Hello" I said. But all I could here was whispering.

         This was getting really creepy. I decided to run to my friends house but when I went to open the door it was locked. The creepiest part is there is no lock on that door. I somehow could not open the door."Oh no" I said. I ran to the back door but something blocked my way. I looked up and saw a shadow looming over me. "Time to die!" it yelled at me. It held up a knife and started to swing it down when everything went black. 

           I woke up to silence "Whew." I said to myself. It was all just a dream. I got up and walked down stairs to get some cereal. As I was pouring my milk I felt my body get cold like I was lying in snow. I turned around and saw him. The shadow. He's real. "You can't escape me Owen. Not even your family" It held up my mom's skull. It was all bloody. I felt like I couldn't breathe. "Now, your turn." I turned around and ran towards the door. I heard it following close behind. When I got close towards the door I realized it was locked so I ran upstairs to climb out a window. When I got to the window in my room I heard it walking up the stairs. "Silly Owen, you think you can escape me?" "Yes I can" I said back. I jumped out the window onto my roof. I ran and jumped off the roof onto the grass. I did a sick roll and started to run to the police station when it caught up to me. "Any last words?" "Yeah". I thought to myself when I remembered something. "Did you see that sick roll when I jumped off the roof?"


                                                                                              - Owen R.

5 comments:

  1. This was amazing! especially intense! I like how you did the creepiness of the slasher. The only thing I didn't like was the ending, it was little bit too cheesy for when your about to die.

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  2. That was super good. Great writing. The only thing I saw is you didn't capitals your (I)s but that is all I saw! Super good!

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  3. Some of your (I)s not all of them.

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  4. This is really good! I really like how you made the story funny at the end. I noticed at the beginning that you used the word "creepy" a lot! Maybe add in a different word for that! Other than that it was really good!

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  5. I loved how you blended creepy and funny-it's kind of a demented story but I liked reading it! As you revise, watch your dialogue so it's not confusing and add more sensory detail (what could you see, smell, taste, touch and feel) and figurative language. You did a sick job writing!

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